Karuna's Evaluation

1. -drinking age -keeping it 21 -statistics -i think you should put a little less statistics regarding how many teenagers drink, but instead how many die from alcohol related deaths or how many turn into alcoholics.

2. -your arguments are hard to find because you state more of why teenagers drink, instead of why they shouldn't -the adolescence brain wants to take risks, so this can cause over-drinking causing danger

3. -alcohol is all around them -it could be in there genes

4. -the writers strongest point is stating why people under the age of 21 drink -the writers weakest point is not stating why teenagers shouldn't drink -yes they are organized good -how many people die from alcohol related deaths -at 18 a person is called a legalized adult and has many responsibilities but they cannot drink

5. - i think the thesis statement is perfect the way it is. straight and to the point.

6. -Increasing the minimum age might actually help save lives of people because when the age was risen to 21, estimated, from 700 to 1,000 lives were saved. So if the minimum age was increased it might help us save more lives. -Increasing the minimum age might help save lives. When the age was changed from 18 to 21, an estimated 700 to 1000 lives were saved. -There are many causes to which why adolescence drink alcohol. One type of factor that is most likely to cause underage drinking is the environment. -One reason why adolescence's drink alcohol is because the environment they are in.